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She sings only harsh dissonance
Wooden body gives no resonance
Her lower notes growl disinterest
Highest strings shriek shrill protest
Under hesitant hands

Polished bright she fools the eyes
Varnished wood, her brief diguise
Her voice, it grates upon the ears
Deception bared for all to hear
By my reluctant hands
©2008-2009 =AmaryllisHakatri
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Poetry prompt exercise in #LitLove. :)

Prompt was "assault upon the senses." I went wayy off track. > .>; Again. Oops.

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:iconevcfenix:
theres some deiphering that needs to done! very good metaphorical use of the violin.
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<su> That is gorgeous :heart: Absolutely beautiful. I realy am in love with this poem, I just love everything about it; the layout, the scheme, the metaphors, just genius. Amazing :]

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:iconamaryllishakatri:
Thank you. :)

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:iconamaryllishakatri:
Thank you very much! :3

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(referring to writing fantasy)
"When it's going well, it's like reaching up into heaven and pulling down fire. It's better than any dope you can buy. When it's not going well, it's much like giving birth to a baby elephant."

-David Eddings
:iconevcfenix:
ur welcome =)

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I like this one a bit - it doesn't wait for the reader to take it line by line, it just throws the next line out and says, "take it in as a whole or ELSE!" (Lack of end-line punctuation is a credit to this poem)

It's succinct and descriptive enough for its purpose.

I also like the repetition of the idea in the last line of each stanza with the hands. :>
:iconamaryllishakatri:
Thanks for the interesting feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed it. (:

--
(referring to writing fantasy)
"When it's going well, it's like reaching up into heaven and pulling down fire. It's better than any dope you can buy. When it's not going well, it's much like giving birth to a baby elephant."

-David Eddings

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